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Short Story Competition - ‘The Fallen Star’
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Gibraltar Chronicle
The secretary had gone to check the generator, leaving Mina with one instruction: if anyone came in, tell them to wait.
He was small, maybe Year Seven, soaked through, holding a battered shoebox with both hands like it might crack.
“Not closed,” Mina said.
The writer uses figurative expression to create a sense of wonder with the ‘building [holding] its breath and the ‘rain stitch[ing] the parking lot.
Magic is woven through the story through excellent use of punctuation, effective structural choices and dialogue that contributes to the sense of wonder.